Tongyeong is a place I would like to visit one day.
Tongyeong is called "Napoli in Korea".
It boasts beautiful sea landscape.
Chungmu-gimbap is most representative food in Tongyeong.
Besides, we can eat many fresh seafoods like oyster, sashimi.
Also, I'd like to go to a marine park tour by ship.
This is a good start. When I read your topic sentence, my question is "Why do you want to visit Tongyeong?" So, your topic sentence is effective.
답글삭제Here are some tips to improve your writing:
1. Each sentence should answer the question: "Why do you want to visit Tongyeong?" Do you want to visit there because it is called "Napoli in Korea"? Why? Look at each sentence to make certain that it is clearly connected to your topic sentence. You have the basics, but you need to directly state why each sentence is a reason you want to visit.
2. Concluding sentence? For example: I am eager to see the sights and try the food at Tongyeong!
3. Formatting: Dont list the sentences. Put them together in paragraph format.
Wow I wanna go to the 통영 , too!!!
답글삭제Because I want to eat 멍게비빔밥.
That really makes me crazy just by a picture.